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Our Story Jared S
Nov 5 2009, 12:03 PM EST
Jim was crazy for skateboarding it was his favroite thing to do in the whole wide world. He really wanted to go out and skate board with his friends, but it was past 9:00 so he had to go to bed. "JIM!" "GET TO BED!" his mom screamed. "Ok Mom!' he replyed. He had the whole night planed out right he his mom would leave for Boston he would sneek out through his window and go to the skate park.He quickly jumped outside with his skate board and raced for the skate park, but he couldn't shake the feeling that somthing was diffrent tonight. As he got closer he started to see a huge hovering thing that lit up the night sky. He saw his friends staring at it too it was almost hpnotysing him and his friends suddenly he snapped out of it and so did his friends. He thought that it almost looked like it was comming closer and closer and closer. He suddenly started to run it was almost like something was forceing him to run away he wanted to get closer but his body wouldn't let him. Suddenly it started to move faster and come closer and closer suddenly he saw this big red beam of light hit him and....... Do you find this valuable? |
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1. my thougts
Nov 9 2009, 11:58 AM EST
He started to rise into a giant saucer. It looked like there were little orange men with four arms and six legs that could act as arms on jetpacks flying around the ship. It was almost like they were escorting it. All of a sudden before Jim went into it he heard what he thought was the commander of the escort say here it is planet Fligwagga The new testing planet. When Jim went in he saw what was the leader he said "my name is jagon I am ruler of the squidons. What happened after the giant lizard? Jim replied" they were said to be wiped out by a comet or a giant volcano erupted" Jagon said" so it was fire mountian we didnt see it when we sent in recon parties in 2000." Jim gasped in shock then said" there really were aliens are you going to invade our planet? Jagon said" no we come in peace we are here to help you there is and alien race called the fligwatiter. They own a giant empire i am in charge of what you call the moon, venus,sun,mars,saturn,neptune,pluto. We have been stopping them from invading we hope you can help us achieve diplomatic relations." Jim shocked and scared asked" but then why did you abduct us and how did we not see you or traces of you when we were on the moon." Jargon said" we do not abduct it was the fligwatiter." Jim asked "can I have some tech like a hover board for travel a grapling gun a jet pack and a communcater/ computer.?' Jargon Said " you have a deal i will see you at the lost lake base here is the tech you asked for just ask where I am and I will give you a map download." Do you find this valuable? |
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2. RE: Our Story Jared S
Nov 9 2009, 12:03 PM EST
His arms went up with a force and he dropped his skateboard he tried to put his arms down but it was like the red beam of light would not let him do that. He was screaming to his freinds " HELP HELP!!!!" He was slowly getting sucked up in to they red beam of light and his freinds ran to get help but when Jim got up in the strange thing that was hovering Jims freinds and him, he saw a screen that showed his freinds running to get help. Then he heard a voice saying " If you want to get back to your home with out your mom finding out you left the house you have to do...." The voice did not continue. " WHAT WHAT?" Jim yelled and a scared voice " what do I have to do?" The voice said.........
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3. RE: Our Story Jared S
Nov 9 2009, 12:05 PM EST
How did the figure hypnotizes them and what was the figures shape was it an alien space ship or was it an alien mother ship what happened to his friends did they get sucked up to? Is there about to be an inter galactic war? Is this going to turn into a chapter book and then many books behind it like a whole series? Is there going to be a giant back story to this 1 little peace of information it could be a good read!
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